I had a lucky escape yesterday. I was at school in the class and the teacher nearly catched me. We had a English test and i’m not good in English the test was very difficult for me, too bad. Lots of questions for gramma and writting and spelling. What can I do? I need good grade. I see a boy near me and he is writting lotta answers. Good! I think OK I can just see maybe what is he writting and do same. Good idea! So this I did but teacher sudenly looked and nearly catched me but I had lucky escape becos she didn’t see me looking at boy near me, just I writting. Lucky escape!
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Content: 5 The
story is clearly related to the title. The target reader would be able to
follow the story, which has a clear beginning, middle and end,
easily.
Communicative Achievement: 4 The format is
appropriate for the task. The target reader
can follow the story with reasonable ease although some effort is required due
to the shift in tenses.
Organisation: 3 The
story is coherent and connected with basic linking words: and; So; sudenly; but,
and a limited number of cohesive devices. There are some
punctuation errors but they do not affect comprehension.
Language: 3 Everyday
vocabulary is used appropriately. There are some errors with spelling:
- gramma - grammer
- writting - writing
- sudenly - suddenly
- becos - because
- catched - caught
- What can I do? - What could I do?
- I see a boy - I saw a boy
