While the policeman was asking questions, I suddenly saw a strange person going out at the back of my neighbour’s house. My neighbour was on holiday, so the house was empty. I had never seen this person before. Suddenly he started to run. I didn’t know what to do, so I shouted to the police, but the man could run very fast and he got away. That was a lucky escape!
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Content: 5 The
story is clearly connected to the title given. The target reader
would be able to follow the story easily. There is a clear beginning, middle
and end.
Communicative Achievement: 5 The story holds
the target reader’s attention and follows the conventions of storytelling.
Organisation: 5 The
text is well organised and coherent with a range of appropriate linking words: when;
while; suddenly; so, and cohesive devices.
Language: 5 A range
of everyday and some less common lexis is used
appropriately. A range of simple
and complex grammatical forms is used with a good degree of control. There is
effective use of a good range of
narrative tenses:
- I was playing in the garden …
- when a police car arrived; …
- didn’t know why the car had come to my house.
