Jo were in car with he friend, Lucy and go from
city in car. Jo decide go in your car and nice day. They leave soon
and take map but Jo looked at map and decided to go left so went in bad way and
Lucy cry. They don’t came in good way and go to the your
home. When they came house nobody home so they watch TV and see film and enjoy.
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Content 4 The
content is relevant to the storyline prompt. The story begins with the prompt,
which is repeated in the middle of the story. The target reader
is informed, and the story has a clear ending.
Communicative Achievement: 1 The storyline is
communicated in simple ways. The format is appropriate, but the target reader
has to make an effort to follow the story
at times, for example, due to errors with pronouns.
Organisation 2 The
text is connected and coherent, using basic linking words.
Language: 2 Everyday
vocabulary is used generally appropriately. Simple grammatical
forms are used with some degree of control but there are a number of errors,
which distract at times:
- Jo were in car with he friend - Jo was in the car with his friend
- They don’t came in good way and - they didn't come the right way
- go to the your home - and went to their house
